I was gong to stat working on a new interleaf section, and finally realized that there are some early story pages out of order.
I think “Black Ops Naga” needs rewriting (I haven’t had my head in teh right space to do it, and anybody who’s interested is welcome to tackle it, by all means) and it actually belongs after “Attention: ET”.
Also, I think “Associations” needs to slide up earlier, right after the new early interleaf page “Begin the Beguine”.
Before I try it, are there any number issues or questions about changing it?
I was having problems placing Listen To My Rhythm and Birdsong, too. I was loath to break up the action at the end of the story, so I placed it before that.
But, in Stormy Weather, the air is being described as still. In my parts, it’s beginning to blow a bit. (I assumed that the storm door rattle in Weathercock was the wind coming up.)
I have zero experience with tropical storms, and can’t find anything on the internet that actually describes the weather that precedes a big storm.
Of course I can rewrite so that it’s eerily still and not blowing, or move the sections so that they come after the whole Callie sequence (when it’s done). But right now they’re kinda awkwardly hanging in space.